Monday, April 20, 2009

Egoistic Me!!

Read this slowly to get the insights of an Egoist!!

I patch
just to tear

I befriend
only for fear

I agree
just to break

I freeze
just to crack

I sense

but never feel

I fall in love

but never faint

I sketch
and never paint

I think
but never dream

I link
but never attach

I mind trade
and never the dealings

I have emotions,
but no empathic feelings

Never a sharpener,
but always a good shredder

In this life, full of trade-offs,
I am certainly, a very smart trader!!


Tried to portray the increasing ego, with the metres, as the poem progresses.
--sudharm baxi (my creation but not me!!)

8 comments:

Lokesh said...

impressive......
your tow lines
"I sketch
and never paint"

touched my hart a lot...

Thanks for writing

Brosreview said...

This is decent enough!!!

sudharm baxi said...

@Lokesh,
@Ajey,

Glad that you liked it.

niket said...

indeed u r a smart trader!!!

sudharm baxi said...

@niket,
As i mentioned, the protagonist of the poem is not me, it is just coming through me man..

zorlone said...

Sudharm,

I like the the way this poem was written. I have always been a big fan of opposites/contrasts used in the lines of a poem.

Z

PS. I am also following you. Ajey aka Brosreview follows pretty good writers/poets!

Thank you for visiting my blog.

Z

sudharm baxi said...

@Zorlone,

Thanks, tried to imbibe those feelings in the simplest yet deepest sense. Tried..

Anuj Shail Gupt said...

and ur tries have gone too far than just an amateur attempt...