Inspired by a beautiful painting of 'a boy and his horse' by Deano on EPTAS -
'a friend in need
is a friend indeed'
is something we read
where ever we lead
but why look for deed
break into this creed
a friend is a friend
and not a piece of need
don't pay any heed
who is in the lead
sow that love seed
and pluck envy weed
we have been freed
of all kinds of greed
we have been freed
coz we are same breed
in wartime you are a steed*
for enemies you are a gleed**
making those fiends bleed
by being my armour n shield
you are my daily feed
God this is what i plead
let me keep this meed***
for which i write n read
*steed - A horse, especially a spirited one.
**gleed - A glowing coal; an ember.
***meed - A merited gift
Someone knows a name for such a poem?
One with similar ending sounds all throughout..
--sudharm baxi
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11 years ago
12 comments:
ab iske liye kya kahu....
the way u played with words is awesome...
good writing indeed!!!
My guess would be rhyming quatrains - don't know any other. Thanks for posting it though.
Its a monorhyme basically !! and i realy loved it :D
@niket,
Shukriya
@Dave, Pretty Me,
Thanks for dropping by and telling me the names, let us call it -
MONORHYMING QUATRAINS!!
well written wid a good flow of words.....very nice dude
@Lokesh,
Your words really help me do better, thanks for the same..
Delightful piece, Sudharm. And I wanted to thank you for your heartwarming comments on EPTAS. Keep up the good work.
@James,
Your words are always inspiring, thanks for the same..
Overdose of rhyming there. I mean, I get the message, but it is on top of the line, on many occasions, frankly.
Hope I am not offending you. Please alert me if I am, okay.
As far as names go, Pretty Me is right.
@Brosreview,
How can i be offended by your suggestions? they are words of wisdom sincerely..
This one piece, in particular i wrote keeping in mind that i have to create something with similar ending sentences throughout the poem, and i agree it became too much an effort that it lost its beauty midway somewhere..
An attempt at something new, part of experimentation you see(i hate to use technical words when it comes to poetry, but could not help).
Thanks again..
Pretty Me!!! is right, it is a monorhyme, simple and delightful ...
"don't pay any heed
who is in the lead
sow that love seed
and pluck envy weed"
This is by far my favorite stanza ... how true.
Amias,
Glad that you liked it..
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